Sunday, June 8, 2014

Explicit Cake


Progression of days playing
in a constant loop,
a marriage of minds.

The loop is safe;
just what we take,
walking all that is left.

Time hangs in the air.
Oceans dry up.

Paths wind in sentences,
give rabbits chase,
willow to climb.

Curves follow a mutual train,
pause for picnic lunch,
explicit cake.

Done with doing, I wait
for the loop to be installed
permanently; with no way out,

a cul-de-sac. 



tk/June 2014


Scrumptious read by R.A.D. Stainforth...glass of wine with lunch...





26 comments:

  1. Nothing more annoying than a constant loop... lol

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  2. I like a constant loop for a time, but then my 'what's next' gene kicks in! This was sinuous and hypnotic - I had to read it a few times and picked out something new each time. Lovely.

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  3. I thought "done with doing" stood out. Excellent. I've been there, doing that.

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  4. i loved the 'done with doing' as well....

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  5. Oh, you made beautiful use of the image .... endless looping, lovely concept.

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  6. The rabbit made me think of Alice (it's very ingrained in me those stories.) Time hangs in the air when you are caught in a loop!

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  7. I've been in a loop... it sucks!! I love your poem however!

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  8. Loops!! I like the soothing tone to the known. But with a bit of luck, the tape breaks and we start again. BTW, those old tape machines are making a comeback! Low tech, real results. Hang on to it!

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  9. Love S4, and your closing cul-de-sac!

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  10. Forget the loops. This is a fine 'sample'.

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  11. Oh, yes, I've had a progression of days like that!

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  12. I like the idea of a loop being safe - you know what's on it, what's coming...but there is also a frustration and a sadness that comes with that. Great to read :)

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  13. Good writing. Not really sure what to make of "The Loop" though. It could be a view on life that is a constant loop, with things never changing much. "The Loop is safe" indicates that we take the safe route without ever challenging ourselves to try something different.

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  14. Beautiful. I love the sound of "explicit cake". I'm seeing visions akin to The Mad Hatter's Tea Party. Lovely.

    ~Jen

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  15. The loop is fine as long as we don't erase it! Interesting piece.

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  16. Tis Groundhog day , Mademoiselle Richtofen !

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  17. Superb! I think we'll all be gathering at the old cul-de-sac tonight!

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  18. a cul-de-sac ~ it's exactly what we get, when waiting for someone to install for us a loop....~ like 'times hangs in the air', but wouldn't love to see 'oceans dry up'...one has to work at his/her dream thoroughly...

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  19. Obviously something recorded on the loop is something you want to hear over and over.
    Just had a stab at my first poem i really fun to do and to meet other participants.

    ~ Eddie

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  20. This bit is delicious: "Curves follow a mutual train,
    pause for picnic lunch,
    explicit cake". I love how it just rolls over my tongue.

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  21. Sometimes a constant loop isn't such a bad thing.

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  22. been there, but now i tend and try to see the end to connect to the next one.

    nice write!

    JJRod'z

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  23. Love the imagery in this Tess...." a marriage of minds".....and "explicit cake".....food for thought of what we remember and what comes back around again.

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  24. Thanks for your kind comments, dear readers...

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