float
free, without string.
Seek
new perspective
from
the living room ceiling―
bend,
squeak, twist,
dazzle
hemispheres.
Edge
close to the sofa―
the
first intimate spin
connects
rampant static.
Rise
above the night sky―
pull
magnetic on paths coincident.
Take
care not to burst
against
the points of stars.
tk/July 2013
Many thanks to R.A.D. Stainforth for adding breath to my words.
Love the points of stars.
ReplyDeleteThanks Annell...good to see you dear friend...
Delete"seek new perspectives from the living room ceiling..." Wow! This is awesome anthropomorphism! fantastic! to follow the balloon on its journey!
ReplyDeleteLovely, Tess... especially the ending!
ReplyDeleteawesome poem! Love the ending!
ReplyDeletePoetry and image make me want to fly ... delightful, Tess.
ReplyDeleteSharp points of stars and words too, spin - I get indeed dizzy...lovely 'float free without strings', nice reading, uplifting write :)
ReplyDeleteExhilarating feel as your words compliment this vision before us.
ReplyDeleteTake care not to burst
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Timely concern expressed. Great way of seeing the country-side. Thanks for hosting, Tess!
Hank
Woah. Good one. I loved the advice in the end, not to burst with the points of stars. lovely. :)
ReplyDeleteOh the end is fun! thanks-
ReplyDeleteNice one, Tess. Stars can be tricky!
ReplyDeleteI absolutely love your closing lines!
ReplyDeletestunning power pointing us to life on fire...good job!!!!!!
ReplyDeletei like connects rampant static
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I agree, the closing lines are a treasured advice.
ReplyDeletePunctured on the points of stars is a lovely image.
ReplyDeleteTake care not to burst
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Favorite lines!!
I liked the opening and closing lines really brought the piece together..a nice poem to read.
ReplyDelete"Seek new perspective." But that's what you do - and so beautifully - each week! Thanks so much, Tess.
ReplyDeleteGreat mushrooms !
ReplyDeleteI must be just too edgy. For my balloons always burst when I go dazzle hemispheres. Of course, being edgy is supposed to be too cool for school these days--yo?
ReplyDeleteLove your rampant static...you'll always find it!!
ReplyDeleteWonderful, with the last two lines being my favorite.
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I love this and imagine the floating balloon as I read. The last line is terrific.
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Thanks for your kind comments, dear readers. Your encouragement means so much to me.
ReplyDeleteReally imaginative. I am glad I found this weekly creative writing prompt. I joined for the first time and posted tonight. :)
ReplyDeletehello tess, i imagined a room with no ceiling.... what a great feeling....
ReplyDeleteGreat collection and I sure wish I could write stories for these pictures!Look how lovely these are. I wish I could draw like this. I will miss you, my sweet friend. Looking forward to when you're back.I really appreciate all your comments, thank you! I’m back behind my desk and hope to start blogging again and catching up with all your lovely blogs in the coming days.............
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Tess,
ReplyDeleteThank you for visiting me today. I am new to this and can see I need to step up my game a lot! Wow, I loved this. I am ready for the next challenge. I so appreciate your craft.
Kim @ Pouring Down Like Rain
Wow,this is excellent! It's been a long time since I've written here but I still remember names! Some of you have been writing here a long time! Hello again!
ReplyDeleteI am trying to read my own poems but don't seem to have the knack. They make my poems seem stupid I have no "style." Lol! This is the way to do it!
Still, I do love to write my poems, so much fun!