Saturday, July 24, 2010

when you're gone

I light a cigarette without a match,
snap a picture without a flash,
sling some mud without the trash,
catchphrase without a catch.

I eat bangers without mash,
smear mascara without a lash,
lone pirate without a patch,
party late without the grass.

I play poker without cash,
plate up breakfast without hash,
watch eggs that never hatch,
feel the itch without a scratch.

I taste passion without pash,
raise the window without a sash,
bumper car without a crash,
hundred yards without the dash.

Swan dive, without a splash.




willow, 2010



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110 comments:

  1. Love it! There's a wonderful strutting to this. A real "cock of the walk" feeling.

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  2. excellent magpie, the loneliness of the empty bed.

    I would like to say how much I have enjoyed joining the magpies and although i have to stay up very late on Thursdays I have tried to come up with an idea there and then. (If I didn't, I'd probably worry at the picture and a thought to go with it all night, so i might as well burn the midnight and even later oil)

    I'd been looking for some time for a regular slot, but found nothing challenging enough until now.

    btw, although I have joined the site as a follower and it comes up regularly on my dashboard, my picture hasn't appeared in the followers' list. ?

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  3. Friko, thank you! I'm glad to hear you're enjoying Magpie! As far as the followers widget, it must be some kind of bug with Blogger. I suggest maybe trying it again.

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  4. a sad ending to the emptiness of going without...nicely written! :)

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  5. Poignant sense of something missing. Indeed.

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  6. Yeah on the swan dive.

    We got three skylights. All are getting old now. I wonder how long they will last. This office was built in 1981 and the skylight is a big one and never leaked and never cracked. Hum

    The one in the kitchen is a double opening. One skylight with two openings. Neat. I thought of it and framed it in myself. Back in the day when I could still do work around the house.

    The one in our family room is as old as the one in the office. The one in the kitchen is the oldest. I forget when I put it in but in the 1970s.

    I think they are well worth the effort.

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  7. I really enjoyed how you managed to describe absence. To me it was a very thoughtful poem that captures a lacking. Almost as if a person without a soul. Thank you for sharing.

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  8. Dear Willow, Your poem immediately suggested to me the title of the 1928 ground breaking novel by Radclyffe Hall.....THE WELL OF LONELINESS.

    I loved the rhythmic imagery.

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  9. Besides loving all the implications of an unmade bed...I also love these words...half done, half complete. The best was the last!

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  10. This poem feels sad and filled with half dones and incompletes.

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  11. Nice work Willow. The rhyme in the piece is so darn playful. It contrasts the dark content well. Striking Magpie! ~Brenda

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  12. Lovely piece, sadness and longing mixed together.

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  13. Smiled all the way through - as usual. Favorite this time was
    "watch eggs that never hatch" AND "hundred yards without the dash", reminds me of many parts of life sometimes. very nice Willow.

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  14. Shoulda, coulda, woulda... Loved the swan dive.

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  15. If you wrote a screenplay based on your Magpie, and then filmed it ... the result would be fantastic! Shot in black and white with Lauren Bacall and Humphrey Bogart types as leads.

    Your Magpies always inspire!

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  16. this has a fun beat to it...but sucks to be apart...superb magpie!

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  17. Helen, I can't decide which I'd prefer, Bogey reading it aloud, or Bacall!

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  18. Ahh to suffer without, while yet doing what we must. Love the poem and the prompt.

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  19. This is beautiful - with the sadness of being alone.

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  20. I envy the talent of the poet. Very, very nice, Willow.

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  21. Hah... strange, I almost read this as a summary of all the previous Magpie Tales.

    Is next week's the bumper car? ;)

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  22. fanstastic, fun and light...loved it.

    much love

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  23. You're a clever girl, and quite a catch.

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  24. You're very good at ending lines, aren't you?

    Show off. ;-)

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  25. I just finished reading Nicholson Baker's The Anthologist which is the story of a poet and anthologist who is putting together a collection of rhyming poems.

    That fictional character would LOVE this poem. As do I.

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  26. You are a poet! Thank you sooooooo much for this prompt, as well as your poem. I hear ya.

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  27. Ahhhh...the emptiness of doing without someone. I can't tell you how much I LOVE the photograph of the women smoking the cigars on your sidebar. I yearn to be so bold when I grow old.

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  28. I love this one, especially the lilting rhythm.

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  29. love the snappy cadence the words make!

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  30. "I taste passion without pash" -- loved this one the best.

    A fabulous poem, Tess. May be my favorite of yours yet.

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  31. It's all been said before, but I too like the jazzy, strutting rhythm vs. the underlying sadness. You had fun with those rhymes! And so did we. Thanks.

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  32. I like the rhythm of this. It mirrors that restlessness that arises when a lover has gone. Very very good!

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  33. Pull yourself together and make the bed, Willow!! Seriously, I agree with 'brenda w' and love the playful sound of this in contrast to the sadness and longing.

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  34. This just raced along and I loved the rhythm and the rhyme...and a sadness about it too

    Christine

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  35. Love it! Spelling it our in so many ways wihtout saying it. :)

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  36. The almost, but not quite.

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  37. I love your style...
    ...amazing writing.. !!!!!!!!!!

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  38. Hell Willow, I've just come from Rhoda, you two add up to genius all by yourselves. Go well, be happy.

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  39. As a child I would "snap a picture without a flash." Most were unrecognizable dim images, but I adored the shadows...the outlines caught in the dusk, like memories turned down low.

    Smashing piece, love.

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  40. Life is way to quiet and boring when the other is gone.

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  41. Dear Willow,

    I love the snappy, jazzy, sassy rhythm.

    We call this aaaa form 'syair' - a form of Persian poetry adopted by the Malays more than 600 years ago.

    By the way Friko - I know exactly how you feel!

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  42. Willow, You've done it again! Of course, your rhyming is perfect but it's the underlying disjointedness of one's not being whole without the other...the loss, the incapability of being able to complete things...YOU ARE A GENIUS! Love it. Coni

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  43. Nice, it has a really nice melody.

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  44. This is so wonderful, Willow! I love every word, the way you have crafted the rhymes and the images...it really is brilliant. This was a delight to read :)

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  45. This is sensational..in my opinion, the best you've done!!

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  46. Very impressive Willow - clever stuff.

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  47. Good one. "swan dive without the splash"

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  48. Willow, you are the bomb! loved it!

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  49. Willow---I think this is one of my most favorite poems that you have written (so far)! It is so melancholy, so alive too. And the rhythm is just wonderful. What to do "without".

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  50. Terrific stuff -- impressive, powerful.

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  51. A sweet tribute to your other half Willow.

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  52. I guess I will have to check out what the Magpies are about? -- barbara

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  53. Wow, thats amazing! It is one of the most catchy poems I've ever read!

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  54. what a magical and animated tale...
    love the beats in the end "...ash"

    I truly love this one!
    highly talented writing!

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  55. Nice Magpie - and great prompt - thank you.

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  56. You have captured emptiness in a whole new way! Awesome writing!
    I love it!! :-)

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  57. I clicked over from Everyday Goddess...glad I did. What a great poem.

    The whole thing felt wonderfully desperate, but the line about the lone pirate without a patch was just perfection. :)

    -C

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  58. As an old home health nurse I had to learn to do many things out in the middle of nowhere with nothing. Loved the rhyme and rhythm of this. You a definitely a poet and our leader of the pack.
    QMM

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  59. which leaves me to ponder how great it would to be with you when you are alone!

    i like this piece. the tone plays between whimsy and soberness

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  60. tour de force!



    and great pez-post



    Aloha from Waikiki

    Comfort Spiral

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  61. This could be a Broadway show tune!

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  62. Liked this very much. When some people are gone from us, we don't seem to be able to do anything right.

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  63. Your adeptness at writing these vignettes week after week--and most of the days between--really shows here, and I am HOOKED, girl! OK? I say "hooked"!!!

    Willow, my "Magpie" will be up tonite B4 midnight...Is it better to be early or late with this 'pie thing?

    Reason I enjoy this so, there IS a lot of leeway, and FEW "rules". But most of all, because your "Magpie" Peeps are interesting writers with fresh ideas, and new perspectives. I enjoy going randomly through the list, although I know so few of them, and there ARE so many.

    How about a weekend get-together of MAGPIE PEEPS (I forgot where you live, bet it's Australia or somewhere like that--grin!).....

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  64. A migration of Magpies to the manor! How fun would that be? No, it's not quite as exotic as Australia. It's hot and humid Central Ohio.

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  65. love the sounds here, love your new header...seems to be speaking to this piece...this prompt is great, ..bravo...bkm

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  66. This describes how I feel without Dr. M perfectly. I always THINK I'll enjoy the quiet & being able to sprawl on the bed - and I do, for about 8 hours. Then he needs to come home!

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  67. You beautifully depicted how it feels to miss someone-wonderful use of words here. Love it, Willow!

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  68. i love how this captures the long lonely nights. I gave you one of my weekly awards which you can collect anytime you like, if you like!

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  69. Well, yes, you have it spot on.

    Lovely piece.

    (Here via Everyday Goddess)

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  70. WILLOW, just my opinion: When I "meet some Peeps" I do not care about weather. If it's cold. we'll get warm with togetherness, if it's hot, we'll drink cool lemonade, and trade real-life stories, the "cooling" kind.

    Central Ohio is just FINE! Or central Oregon I would not care. My scooter WILL go that far--grin!

    Mid-August I'll be going on my 2nd annual "Ride for Freedom" (gave it a name this year to sound like a charity--grin!) during which I stop in towns where bloggers live, and visit, sometimes for a couple hours, and some times for several days (when scooter breaks down! As it did in Charleston SC) Last year I rode 3,000 miles in 3 weeks. Probably do the same this year, unplanned, uncharted, unmapped, NOT underwritten! I'm already excited about this, as you can tell?

    Made it to Richmond VA last August/September.

    Pls excuse the long comment...

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  71. NICE! I loved this one. Very clever repetition of "without" as well as meter. The rhyme here is unique as it is pulled to the end and makes this fun to read aloud. I love simply penned poems with more depth as you read them again and again. Great magpie piece, willow.

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  72. I think those words in your sidebar are for me: don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened. Thanks Willow. I am taking that to heart right now.

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  73. There is something both sad and joyous about this poem, it has a defiant and youthful spirit.

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  74. For some reason, I thought of the words of the old song, "I washed that man right out of my hair." If only we could "let go," so easily. I liked it.

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  75. For some reason, I thought of the words of the old song, "I washed that man right out of my hair." If only we could "let go," so easily. I liked it.

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  76. i love the flow of this piece and how everything just doesn't seem right without the poem's subject. thank you for sharing :)

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  77. Love the withouts/ Reminds me of napples
    and English lover of poetry and rhyme.

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  78. Dear Willow: This song of love is awesome as it is so personal. I feel the emptiness of the missing "other half" of "one flesh". You come undone when missing your man. That's love for you! Have I been there; oh yes...there is that je ne sais quoi (that I don't know) that special something missing when one's man is away. You have captured the feeling brilliantly; especially; "I taste passion without pash". btw your painting is c'est magnifique! par excellence! The rendering of the image shows much talent, skill and pinache!Backstory on the art work...please?:)

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  79. Chicco, I added a little note in the blog footer about the header piece. It's a detail from Romaine Brooks' self portrait, 1923. I connect with it on a strange spiritual level and see much of myself in it. Glad you like it!

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  80. Excellent magpie! Wonderful response to the prompt!

    -Weasel

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  81. This one could be put to a catchy tune!

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  82. Hi Wills, I love your blog so much I passed an award on to it. Pick it up at the farm - gatheratthefarm.blogspot.com

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  83. Words fail me but evidently not you. Gifted beyond belief.

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  84. This poem is a stunner! I chuckled at Derrick saying "make the bed"...and wondered if WT & the Colonel share this make-the- bed-if-it-is-the-only-housekeeping-you-do attitude...My older son used to say his dad's definition of adulthood was if you made your bed...LOL...Now I confess, I like my bed made perfectly...but when my sweetheart is away...I may not make it until after dinner some days! This poem really evokes the many long months he and I have had to spend apart over the years...I can relate! So unique & so YOU...and maybe just bit of your muse - Romaine Brooks--stirred in!

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  85. FireLight, actually I'm one of those who leaves the bed unmade most days. No Colonels around here to snap me to attention! ;^) I like the comfortable, romantic, inviting feel of an unmade bed.

    Yes, Romaine Brooks is most definitely my muse! At least for now.

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  86. That's an excellent poem, Willow--the rhyme works so effortlessly. One of your very best!

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  87. John, coming from you, that's an extra special compliment. Thank you. xx

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  88. It's nice to know that I'm not the only one who only occasionally makes the bed. Love the whimsical cadence of this poem.

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  89. Gosh you're good girl - this is a winner! Reminds me that MOTH must be due for a weekend away with the boys. I'm craving for muesli without the milk for dinner & a bed without the other.
    Millie ^_^

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  90. I like this and its zany rhythm.

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  91. been there, done that. happy days are here again

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  92. Very funny. Lite like a souffle. Pronounced like olay. All that word play.

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  93. loved "I taste passion without pash," brilliant. beautiful.

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  94. I just came from Martin's blog and the Sinatra/Holiday comments and I have to say, this piece of yours is really fab and would make a great song - sounds just like one of those big band numbers. Loved it!
    Really like how you used those short-forms of the words to rhyme - gave it a bit of a kick and made it even more snappy.

    Kat

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  95. Loved this and especially the last line . . . thanks for both a great prompt and a wonderful poem.

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  96. Willow,
    Once you've done it with, it's never the same alone!
    rel

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  97. BRILLIANT wordplay!!!
    It had a sadness to it, true... but the wit employed here is just amazing!! I am awestruck! A super magpie!

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  98. I had fun with that all the way through. I've not read them all the Magpie's yet but this one is definitely one of my favorite.

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  99. This one! This one is incredible! I can't tell you how very much I love it. The wittiness, the wordsmithing, the longing. I just love it.

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  100. Charming and witty. Why is rhyming so delicious?

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  101. Thanks, everyone, for your generous comments! It's always such a pleasure to share my poetry with you. You're the best. xx

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