Thursday, November 19, 2009
Late
Late
Night's metallic deep
tastes like coin
between my teeth.
Steel cold beneath
drags day's bones
down to Davy Jones.
I forgot the combination;
click back and forth
like numbers on a clock.
Ex marks the spot,
but won't unlock the dark.
Lights flicker from the dock;
dits and dahs in code
say take off a load,
hit the hay, go to sleep
or to Hell's gate.
Sink, burn or keep
me as a prize,
because it's late.
Or just too early to rise.
willow, 2009
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I didn't take this photo, but it looks amazingly like the lights on the dock, across the river from the manor!
ReplyDeleteyour poetry is always an inspiration to me to write some of my own!
ReplyDeletethere is sweet irony in that early late willow. smiles.
ReplyDeletelove the imagery in this one, the sinking yet forgetting the combination...hmmm...and the pic is quite wonderful.
There I was, thinking you'd write of wee ghosties and you never! You leave me bereft of my dose of spooks after midnight.
ReplyDeleteNice post though.
sounds like scenes from another life...
ReplyDeleteSometimes the combination comes to us after we have fallen asleep.... nice one, Willow. -Jayne
ReplyDeleteWOW,really WOW!
ReplyDeleteWow, Willow! I love the first stanza the best. It's beautiful! :)
ReplyDeleteFab poem, Willow!
ReplyDeleteI used to have to deal with combination locks daily. They could sure keep me awake!
Glad I was able to read "Late" early this morning! I could just about taste the metallic through your words...plenty of mystery here!
ReplyDeleteI have a recurring dream of being at my high school locker and not remembering the combination. While I'm at it, the photo looks like many of my dreams in that they are darklit.
ReplyDeletevery nice, ladywillow! beautiful flow and rhythm! have a great day!
ReplyDeleteLovely & haunting poem, Willow. Good job.
ReplyDeleteWow, loved the first line...
ReplyDeleteOh, the combination lock dream...I can soooo relate! ha!
ReplyDeleteI didn't know what the theme was this week! I've had one of those weeks trying to catch up, busy, busy!
ReplyDeleteLoved this! You are my hero!
much love
Love this poem! I'm a night person myself and have always enjoyed the mystery of it.
ReplyDeleteAnd I had to stop by here today after reading that our Johnny was recognized again for being the sexy man that he is. ; )
nice verse..the 1st three lines, wow....and an ominous ending.
ReplyDeletehmmm, went to post my comment and it didn't go through so will have to type it up again which you know what an ordeal That is for me being the horrid typist I am!
ReplyDeleteWell, I think the photo you selected goes great with the wonderful poem--has that metallic feel to it even. Another great entry, Willow.
BTW, I enjoyed your revised profile blurb.
great photo. esp love the first stanza with that metallic taste.
ReplyDeleteYour work conjurs up vivid mental images! Fabulous post! Happy TT!
ReplyDeletemy goodness Willow - maybe you should just give up this silly blog stuff and write poetry full time!
ReplyDeleteyour poem reminds me of my college days for some reason. The late nights, the exes (or in my case the never-weres). one's body does produce a metallic feeling when one is up too late.
ReplyDeleteI like how you have subtle pirate references without using "like" or "as."
I prefer just to early to rise Willow!
ReplyDeleteLovely.
In the secular night ...
ReplyDeleteI interrupt this POST to remind Willow and her followers that the program/tribute on Johnny Mercer is airing at 6:00 EST (in 3 mins) on Turner Classic Movies...hope you catch a tune or two!
ReplyDeleteJust lovely. I can taste the metal. Feel the chill.
ReplyDeleteMerisi,
ReplyDelete"now, forty years later, things have changed"
Thanks for the reminder, FireLight!! Hope some of you get to catch it tonight, who missed it last week.
ReplyDeleteAh Willow, you are indeed a poet.
ReplyDeleteThis one...
Night's metallic deep
tastes like coin
between my teeth.
...gave me cold chills... and that is the mark of a dazzler's way with words.
Nice - the emotionality of the senses, the pull of the day's/the night's lateness upon all our perceptions. Well-drawn.
ReplyDeleteArrgh, Jen, I love a subtle bit of pirate talk. ;^)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem Willow. "because it's late. Or just too early to rise". I love that and it's found its way into my pocketbook.
ReplyDelete"hit the hay, go to sleep...."
ReplyDeleteI think you have been keeping your artistic clock wound up while on your own ? Just maybe? ....I do the same all summmer and during holiday breaks....up late...or early depending on whose clock you may be measured by...and running a house and managing a family....rarely is it your own....
I can relate to "Late."
I love being up and working on a project during the wee hours.
Willow weep for me.
ReplyDeletePoetry is not a turning loose of emotion,
but an escape from emotion.
( T.S. Elliot )
OR maybe;;
A poet is a nightingale
who sits in darkness and sings to cheer it;s own solitude with sweet sounds. (Shelly)
Very beautiful! sweet one.
Yvonne
"Night's metallic deep
ReplyDeletetastes like coin
between my teeth."
YEAH, that is SO GOOD!!!
Wonderful poem and pic.
Happy tt!
I have some of my best thoughts when falling asleep. Love your poetry.
ReplyDeleteJust watched The Mayor of Casterbridge. I think you are the one that mentioned. It was wonderful.
ReplyDeleteAmazing poem.
QMM
Wonderful post, the picture is so amazing, the use of the light/darkness.
ReplyDeleteThis is lovely..and that photo is perfect!
ReplyDeleteSt. Brigid is no doubt smiling on you, dear Willow:)
you just described my insomniatic ways.
ReplyDeleteYour writing is always so strong, Willow. It brings up many images in my mind as I read it. xx
ReplyDeleteI love dusky photographs with twinkly lights--- and the words to match.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poetry!!
ReplyDeleteLate...
"The century grinds on."
ReplyDeleteI was wondering whether you had been inspired by Atwood's "Secular Night" - one of my alltime favorite poems.
Lot of favorite dits and dahs here. Especially like: "Night's metallic deep tastes like coin between my teeth."
ReplyDeleteThat photo does have a haunting feel to it.
I didn't realise you lived beside water - it must be such an idyllic spot, willow.
ReplyDeleteLovely poem as ever
x
The one thing that I cannot do is to draw meaning out of poetry. Maybe it is just the thought that I might get it wrong, and I hate being wrong! It is very nicely written, I just really feel ignorant sometimes!
ReplyDeleteWe All Have A Prize & We Are All Late In Finding It!
ReplyDeleteGreat Big Poem Willow.
T.
I got your message. Thank you. I always enjoy your poetic works. They inspire me to do something new. I like your use of tastes and imagined sounds to describe the "neither" hours. Neither wake nor sleep. Pappy
ReplyDeleteRising early is better for me than sleepless all night, to nod off for 2 minutes at dawn, and rise in a stupor..great poetry!
ReplyDeleteI need to write something about the dentists.
ReplyDeleteI was thinking of posting "Late", late.
ReplyDeleteIs this a dream, within a dream? (Sorry, Alan Parsons crept in there.)
It's like a series of haikus about a nightmare. So many crystal clear images, I could go on and on. You may gather I liked this one a great deal.
(What's a "wooly-sock" flick, by the way?) I do love both Bergmans and will have to get hold of this film.
Thanks, Kat, I'm honored when you like my stuff.
ReplyDeleteI fondly call a "curl up and enjoy the show" kind of movie a "woolly socks flick". "Autumn Sonata" is definitely NOT one. It's very intense.
I am speechless....that was so wonderful I don't even know what to say....and I love the photograph you picked to go with it...
ReplyDeleteI don't even know how I got here this morning...but lucky me...
I see Mr. Toast is here (he is MY FAVORITE)..maybe that's how..
But I will be following you...
Just Lovely,
Kary
Beautiful poem, Willow.
ReplyDeleteOh, nice piece!
ReplyDeleteLovely, slightly creepy poem willow.
ReplyDeleteI believe old Will Shakespeare may have had you in mind, Willow, when he wrote: "Much is the force of heaven-bred poetry."
ReplyDeleteFrench Fancy, yes, the manor is on the banks of the Scioto River. (pronounced sigh-OH-toe)
ReplyDeleteThanks for taking the time to stop by. I LOVE being at Willow Manor...it makes me HAPPY...and I know that fruitcake....hopefully I can get this one right with the dried fruit and nuts..I'll post picture and recipe when I make it...
ReplyDeleteMore Later,
Kary
Love it, love it, love it.
ReplyDeleteThe Zhivago hat is working wonders, I see. ;)
It's almost like someone walking into the lake.It really reminds me of the film garage.Did you ever get to see it Willow? This poem would fit.Those first three lines are magic.It's impossible to fault them and they are so original>i 'm lured by the 'tastes like coin' Not 'a coin' or 'coins' It just works so well.Could this be the night air before the steel cold of the water? Almost like home/sanctuary/sanity is lost or unrecognisable.It is enigmatic yet saysso many things and probably a different thing to each reader.I really like it.I'd love to know the thinking /inspiration behind it.
ReplyDeleteThe imagery is profound and well-executed in sucession of events. I can imagine the weightiness beginning with the sinking like lead through water in the mouth, like a National Geographic sailor found on an early exploration by Perry or Henry Hudson, dead from too much lead, his mouth looking horrible. (I have a pic like this of myself!) Anyhow..get some sleep..i hear that there are natural chelation methods, dont go for those other kinds they are dangerous! ps Johnny Depp will save you, think of you and he in Pirates of the Carribean and you'll be asleep in no time. Wasnt Depp just pegged as The Sexiest Man Ever? Such Choclate brown mezmerizing eyes..sure can dream..hell yah, hell can wait..i got Johnny!
ReplyDelete:-))!!!
ReplyDeleteA great blend of image and text.
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