O! claustrophobic air―
apparent and busy in the sun.
Dust hangs in waves of spring,
a universe from the bliss of nowhere.
What fallen star, what robin,
what powdered sooth plays a second chance?
Follow flotsam to the horizon,
cross the bridge through gathering cloud.
Inhale motes and flutter-boats―
the balm of dusk explodes a single sigh.
tk/April 2014
Beautiful, Tess. Flighty as New England weather
ReplyDeleteThe extraordinary sexiness of your words -- again --
ReplyDeleteThe unexpected quick rhyme in the last stanza contrasts with the somberness in the last line to... pretty much blow my mind. Fantastic.
ReplyDeletebeautiful imagery ....especially love the last two lines
ReplyDeleteOh, my. A splendid read by Ronaldo. I thought I heard a bit of Burton in there.
ReplyDelete... don't laugh, but this sounds so very Shakespearean to me ... just sayin'.
ReplyDeleteInhale motes and flutter-boats―
ReplyDeletethe balm of dusk explodes a single sigh.
A movie in words.
At first i thought " not her best work", but i came to appreciate the power as time rolled by...all the while thinking " is the girl in the image her ?"
ReplyDeleteI always suspected you were a motie , and now its confirmed
"The Mote In Gods Eye"
( its a book)
Another fine word painting Tess. And with RAD's reading I can just about detect that cloud of Sahara dust that has settled on our fair and dusty Isle.
ReplyDeleteLike your sounds in the last stanza. Who knew that all about dust...
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ReplyDeletewhat an impactful ending!
Follow flotsam to the horizon,
ReplyDeletecross the bridge
That's some journey :-)
I love this: inhale motes and flutter boats.
ReplyDeletedust hangs in waves of spring..I think a window needs to be opened..I always
ReplyDeleteenjoy your writings.
Thanks for all your kind and generous comments, dear readers...
ReplyDeleteAh yes, I'm a flutter with, "Inhale motes, and flutter boats..." images alive again.
ReplyDeleteWhat a flow...as beautiful as the picture....
ReplyDeleteTess - what more can you do but inhale in awe? Inhale again at RAD's reading!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Tess. I'm learning much from reading your lovely interpretations of the prompts. I love the simplicity.
ReplyDeleteA wonderful write and I love the last line. You are a true craftswoman of words!
ReplyDeleteEspecially loving those last two lines.
ReplyDelete(Hey, you came late to your own party, today!)
;)
I could spend days picturing "the balm of dusk". And I might...
ReplyDeleteGeez, Tess, this is so great! Now, if I were the CEO of the company that makes Allegra or Claritin, or any other allergy medication and I read this, I would have my people call your people to discuss having it used in company advertising!
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