Sunday, December 2, 2012

Undone

R.A.D. Stainforth's powerful read...

 This keystone calls
for more than cutlery
to be undone―

use your hands.

Hypnotize. Confuse
with the power of your eyes.

Search for anything tasty
that might be embedded
in the framework.

Hit bone.

Level to a gratifying heap.
Make primal sounds.
Plow supreme. Dissolve

my poorly cared for lack of will
with the force of a wrecking ball.


tk/December 2012


Object to be Destroyed by Man Ray
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46 comments:

  1. christopherSun Dec 02, 10:21:00 AM

    You are as visceral as ever, my dear.

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  2. DCWSun Dec 02, 10:26:00 AM

    Keystone
    nice image
    didn't see that

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  3. jasmine calyxSun Dec 02, 10:37:00 AM

    This is awesome! I love your opening and this whole section:

    "Search for anything tasty
    that might be embedded
    in the framework.
    Hit bone.
    Level to a gratifying heap.
    Make primal sounds.
    Plow supreme. Dissolve"

    So yeah, all of it. :)

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  4. Amrit SinhaSun Dec 02, 10:57:00 AM

    Loved the poetry that went along with the image ... Perfect !!!

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  5. Laurie KolpSun Dec 02, 12:16:00 PM

    Oh, I love this Tess... especially the ending.

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  6. Magaly GuerreroSun Dec 02, 12:19:00 PM

    "my poorly cared for lack of will
    with the force of a wrecking ball."

    My bones are still ringing with the contrast between these two lines. The need and the determination are so strong...

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  7. Kathe W.Sun Dec 02, 12:43:00 PM

    damn that wrecking ball! Great poetry Tess!

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  8. anthonynorthSun Dec 02, 12:48:00 PM

    Excellent poem and i loved the last two lines.

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  9. JinksySun Dec 02, 01:16:00 PM

    Level to a gratifying heap.
    Make primal sounds.

    That's one way to do it...

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  10. AnonymousSun Dec 02, 01:52:00 PM

    So much depth as always...Concert early this evening. Will try to have a go at this when I return.

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  11. DaydreamertooSun Dec 02, 02:09:00 PM

    Ahh... take me as I am.... love me right to the bone...Nice! :)

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  12. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerSun Dec 02, 02:52:00 PM

    Great imagery Tess--and I loved the ennd!

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  13. UnknownSun Dec 02, 04:53:00 PM

    my god...this is what it's like to write

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  14. BerowneSun Dec 02, 05:06:00 PM

    Wish you hadn't mcntioned my poorly cared-for lack of will. Struck home... :-)

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  15. sukipoetSun Dec 02, 07:27:00 PM

    imaginative and original imagery i need a wrecking ball in my own life!

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  16. MargaretSun Dec 02, 08:22:00 PM

    Lived Catfish Tales comment. Ha. Wow. Perhaps everyone needs a wreckingball like this at lest once in their life.

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    1. MargaretSun Dec 02, 08:23:00 PM

      Sorry for the typos. I'm not the greatest on my tiny iPhone

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    2. Tess KincaidSun Dec 02, 08:47:00 PM

      I consider myself very fortunate to have a wrecking ball...

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  17. Tumblewords:Sun Dec 02, 09:18:00 PM

    Oh, for sure. What would life be like without a wrecking ball. Terrific poem.

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  18. ArianSun Dec 02, 11:23:00 PM

    All this is noted, Tess. Esp "confuse with the power of your eyes".

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  19. WayneSun Dec 02, 11:25:00 PM

    another good poem Tess

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  20. SreejaMon Dec 03, 01:59:00 AM

    it says so much as i read again and again... brilliant!

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  21. AnonymousMon Dec 03, 10:11:00 AM

    Each time I read this a different thing brings gratification...and each week RAD imbeds his own tasty nuggets into the framework.

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  22. JBinford-BellMon Dec 03, 11:38:00 AM

    Object to be destroyed. I focused on the object and you focused on the destruction. I love the way everyone comes out with something different from the same image.

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  23. HelenMon Dec 03, 12:13:00 PM

    Hypnotic ... like the beat, beat, beat of the metronome.

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  24. PratibhaMon Dec 03, 03:12:00 PM

    engaging !

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  25. LLM CallingMon Dec 03, 03:28:00 PM

    Praying against the force of that wrecking ball

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  26. LynMon Dec 03, 04:56:00 PM

    You sure know how to demolish a poem..you win...quite amazing!

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  27. Other MaryMon Dec 03, 05:02:00 PM

    Yummm...

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  28. UnknownMon Dec 03, 11:21:00 PM

    I love the power inherent in your words and in the prompt. Well penned, Tess. Thank you for sharing your imagination. It is meant to be shared..... dear friend. =D

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  29. VacciniusTue Dec 04, 12:10:00 AM

    IT HITS ME

    For sure a hit
    is never fit.
    For sure it is
    concealing this.

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  30. JJ Roa RodriguezTue Dec 04, 08:33:00 AM

    Amazing write Miss Tess!..

    JJRod'z

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  31. Silent Otto Tue Dec 04, 09:10:00 AM

    Somewhat ominous, but i doubt your will would dissolve that easily !

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  32. Doctor FTSETue Dec 04, 09:11:00 AM

    What's a poor little metronome done to deserve a wrecking ball? Powerful poem, though.

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  33. Carrie Van HornTue Dec 04, 09:33:00 AM

    Your amazing words have the force of a wrecking ball dear Tess! :-)

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  34. MarchelineTue Dec 04, 11:11:00 AM

    "Hypnotize... Confuse with the power of your eyes"... reminds me of the opening scenes of "Vertigo" (which I am showing tonight to a couple of young and uninitiated friends). Am on a serious James Stewart kick right now. 8-) Great poem!

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  35. The BugTue Dec 04, 04:13:00 PM

    "Dissolve my poorly cared for lack of will with the force of a wrecking ball." This happens to me daily! And actually it doesn't even take a wrecking ball most of the time. Sigh.

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  36. KateTue Dec 04, 05:56:00 PM

    I have yet to understand a single poem. I don't get it.

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    1. Tess KincaidWed Dec 05, 03:49:00 PM

      Moey, poems can take on various meanings to individual readers...hopefully something within the poem strikes you...something you can connect with and take away with you...

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  37. Dave KingWed Dec 05, 04:22:00 AM

    Fine poem with a devastatingly powerful ending.

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  38. M. A. S.Sat Dec 08, 03:13:00 AM

    Search for anything tasty...

    Oh, I love that stanza!

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Inject a few raisins of conversation into the tasteless dough of existence.
― O. Henry (and me)

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