Ties tear fast,
clenched tight
between your teeth;
the precision rip,
a gratifying
naughty thing.
My fingers press
the raggy stoic knots,
aerodynamic in design.
Never mind the string ―
the tail drags
to our undoing,
so heavy in perfection.
tk, September 2012
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| Flying Down, 2006, by David Salle |
I always left the tail off to insure a safe take off!!
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haha a bit of a surreal pic and verse...but fun though...makes me smile on the tail dragging....nice action in this as well...the ripping with teeth...
ReplyDeleteMy recent exploits have been decidedly unsuccessful; grandsons disappointed!
ReplyDeletelove the tearing..ripping....and raggy...in just that mood....!!x
ReplyDeleteSad thing about kites, they have to come back to Earth sooner or later... Bit like that dead duck! :)
ReplyDeleteLove the swirl as a ravel and the string throughout. How clever to think of kites.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully surreal.
ReplyDeleteloved the "raggy stoic knots"
ReplyDeleteBrava-- elegant diction-- always a wonderful to see you lead the charge. xxxj
ReplyDeleteIndeed heavy in perfecting the image in words...
ReplyDeleteHugs xoxo
Haven't flown a kite for years - this brought it all back.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully created !!!
ReplyDeleteHigh flying kites ~ nice twist on Flying Down ...
ReplyDelete(love that flickr pic!)
The kite, the kite, the kite...
ReplyDeleteI never mastered kites :( and I tried hard. Paper airplanes too. I remember my bed covered with try after try. They never flew as I wanted even when they did fly.
Love the 2nd stanza...I'm airborne over this!! Lovely..
ReplyDeleteCaptivatingly fresh and flighty read, Tess! Loved it!
ReplyDeleteEdgy.
ReplyDeleteKite flying is a healthy pastime. Freedom in the open! Nice write Tess!
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Fly! Now chase it little girl!
ReplyDeleteLet it take you aloft!
I never could really get any kites to fly. I'm not sure what I was doing wrong! I love this piece.
ReplyDeleteThere are layers here that I quite like. Surreal and engaging, I dig it.
ReplyDeleteWonderful, Tess. The last bit is heavy indeed. My relationship with my father is complex, and this touches some deep feeling.
ReplyDelete"...the precision rip,
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naughty thing"
I know that feeling.
Clever write Tess and beautifully written too.
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Yes, the kite picture... I get that, but what tail are you talking about? :-)
ReplyDeleteYou certainly were flying a kite with this one.
ReplyDeleteGood tale for a true tail! Ha ha I must be punchy- thank you for the prompt and hosting!
ReplyDeleteI never could get a kite to fly - wrong wrist action, maybe ;-)
ReplyDeleteEvokes wonderful memories of treasured moments with Daddy - except when we watched it fly out to sea!
ReplyDeleteLike the "tie" between neckties and kites. Many similarities between the two. But the biggest difference is that neckties seem stiff and rigid, as you write. But kites represent freedom. We have to let go of the tail to let it fly free. Kites remind me of spring and new beginnings.
ReplyDeleteanother good one from Willow Manor Tess....thanks for sharing your words again....and of course the prompt
ReplyDeleteQuite lovely.
ReplyDeleteDreamy memories of our halcyon days of childhood. A nice metaphor for the artwork, Tess. Thank you for sharing. =D
ReplyDeleteTail dragging eh? Tess you will chuckle when you read my piece. I love the fluidity of this poem and the places that it takes me.
ReplyDeleteThere is a whole lot of stuff floating across his painting, and your crafty words seem to tightly tie them all up, just perfectly!
ReplyDeleteTessa...such a great one here...thankyou ...love it!
ReplyDeleteLike Athene dlying a kite with Zeus eh? , interesting they are diamond shaped, a girls best friend
ReplyDeleteas always... beautiful!
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This is surreal, but I like it. It's a very creative look at breaking free.
ReplyDeleteA precision rip is no easy task...a lovely, lively piece.
ReplyDeleteI tasted that first stanza. So much strength, passion, and desperation. A feeling that says I will hold on to you even if it hurts.
ReplyDeleteBrilliant layers.... :)
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