R.A.D. Stainforth's lovely delivery...
I
sit cross-legged and watch,
as
your sea fades and shrinks;
shell-like
bubbles break,
in
the lingering suds.
I
listen, bath-wrinkled,
shiver,
as your voice runs liquid,
your
soft night-time eyes blink,
as
you take a drag,
curls
drip behind your ears;
your
lips within kissing distance.
very atmospheric tess...i like the fading sea...really nice textures too...the suds, the shells....the close has a nice warm intimacy...
ReplyDeleteVery pretty poem, Tess.
ReplyDeleteI particularly like the image of curls dripping behind ears... that's slightly erotic, and stirs my imagination! Then again, maybe I'm just a naughty monkey.
ReplyDeletedrives a lot of imagination with this Miss tess... cool!
ReplyDeleteJJRod'z
This is quite touching.
ReplyDeletetotally provacative...ya gotta love a man in a bathtub!!!
ReplyDeletebathing and soaking together-this is lovely.
ReplyDeletelovely thank you for great prompt and sharing your lovely poem x
ReplyDeleteSultry, seductive, sensual.
ReplyDeletePretty piece, subtle.
ReplyDeleteWho hasn't been bath-wrinkled in the name of love? Sweet memories evoked.
ReplyDeleteThis poem, and Stainforth's reading...the perfect match.
ReplyDeleteYour poem, so clean and kissable is wonderful Tess. I have a strong urge to wrap it up in a thick towel and rub it up and down. heehee =D
ReplyDeleteBathing together is great fun,
ReplyDeleteand it certainly can lead to
several fun options. Perhaps
you only intended to bathe
him while he is in the tub,
but for some reason I see
you boob-deep in sensual suds.
Ohhhhh. "as your sea fades and shrinks."
ReplyDeleteYES.
Love it.
De Jackson (WhimsyGizmo) http://whimsygizmo.wordpress.com/2012/04/29/the-anecdote-of-the-jar/
Bath-wrinkled... I love it. As always, a stellar piece.
ReplyDeletewithin kissing distance....very nice.
ReplyDeletewonderful words as always Tess..x
ReplyDeleteExquisitely wrought and evocative, Tess-- and sensual. Somebody's in your sights in a ravishing way...xxxj
ReplyDelete"lovely delivery" clever.
ReplyDeleteIs this poem an ode to R. A. D. Stainforth? Liquid voice, eyes blink, take a drag, curls...ahem
Tess, I love the intimacy in this...very nice!
ReplyDeleteExquisite reading. Poetry should be read aloud. Slowly and deliberately without self-conscious raising of the voice at the end of each line. Breathing between lines giving each listener time to partake of each couplet. Lovely. This poem brings the reader into a place. Each couplet entices with specific words: shrinks, lingering. runs liquid, night-time yes blink, drag......and then you turn the reader's head toward the curls and UNDERSTATE the ending. Positively enlarges the romance. THe reader is left in the limbo of hope. AWESOME.
ReplyDeleteDear Tess: Stylish, tres film noir' very romantic mood. Adored;
ReplyDelete"night-time eyes blink". Master class~!
Tres cool!
ReplyDeleteRAD looks like he has lost weight. What are you doing right? : )
Ooh, I love these:
ReplyDelete"shiver, as your voice runs liquid,
your soft night-time eyes blink"
rosemarymint.wordpress.com
A very sensual encounter with the mer man via the bath - portal
ReplyDeleteVery nice. I love how each line connects to the next one, as in Watch/Fades/Break Bubbles/Suds/bath Listen/Voice/blink drag/curls/ ears/ lips and also curls behind/distance. Pretty cool. Thanks
ReplyDeleteA drag and a kiss.... Alas, but memories of another time.
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A lovely capture, the suds, the bubbles, the wet curls behind the ear. It's sensual, subtle. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteHis world is definitely shrinking!
ReplyDeletethanks-
Wow, evocative images there!
ReplyDeletelove the "shiver" in the middle of the poem... I'm a thinkin' that "tingling" isn't from the cold ;P Very smoooooth poem. Loved it!
ReplyDeleteFrom beginning to end so many wonderful images in this Tess! Lovely writing as always! :-)
ReplyDeleteThis poem elicits the 'butterflies' in the stomach that I felt at the first blush of teenage love--haven't felt them in years. Your writing is so sensual and lovely!
ReplyDeleteI am drawn to the gentle sensuality here... fine stuff Tess!
ReplyDeleteVery sensual without being in-your-face about it. That's the artistry of the thing. Great write. Vb
ReplyDeleteOne word ~~ delicious!
ReplyDeletebath-wrinkling beats pruning! Great poem...
ReplyDeleteI swear.......RAD delivers the (very) goods better with a fag/cigarette in hand!
ReplyDeleteGood reading, Tess! Very sensuous, tugs at the love strings! Great write!
ReplyDeleteHank
I have to agree with Brian, you've certainly set an atmosphere. Beautiful, Tess!
ReplyDeleteYou have perfectly captured the essence of the image of Paul McGann in the bathtub (from the movie "Withnail & I") that I recently posted about. Especially the curls bit... gah, I could just eat him up whole!
ReplyDeleteSuch a romantic vision! This lovely dreamy imagery is not only one of your best (in my opinion) but also one of your most accessible. (That comment says more about me than you, of course! :-)
ReplyDeleteLovelt poem, as usual. "Bath wrinkled" makes it!
ReplyDeleteGreat piece with lovely imagery.
ReplyDeleteLoved this, particularly the last two lines. Nice.
ReplyDeletenice imagery
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Thank you all for reading and leaving your kind comments...it would be far less satisfying to write without your wonderful feedback...you're the best...
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